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发表于 2018-7-14 05:15:29 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
Martin Luther KingJr., a famous civil rights leader, offers a convincing argument on theunjustness of the involvement of the United States in the Vietnam war. In Martin Luther King’sspeech “Beyond Vietnam- A Time to Break Silence”, King utilizes personalexperience, appeal to ethos and vivid word choice to attain his goal- to persuade the audience that theUnited States was not supposed to get involved in the Vietnam war.
King begins his speechwith the connection between the war in Vietnam and his personal observation inthe United States. At first he saw a “shining moment”-the “poverty program”- for both black and white poorAmericans; however, as the preparation for the Vietnam War began, he “watched thisprogram broken and eviscerated.” By introducing this anecdote, King illustrateshow the war in Vietnam is affecting the domestic day-to-day life of theAmericans, challenging the audience to make a personal connection. Thispersonal encounter provides a baseline of sorts for the reader to find credencewith King’s claim that the war is “an enemy of the poor” and involvement in thewar is unjust.
King, in order tofurther develop his argument, appeals to ethos by contrasting examples in thesecond paragraph. Watching “Negro and white boys” being killed in the Vietnam warfare,watching them “die together for the country”, and watching them “in brutalsolidarity burning the huts a poor village” makes it ironic to think about thatdomestically rather than being together, they are cruelly segregated; poorpeople live in totally different communities from the others; black and white childrenare not allowed to sit in the same classroom. King adopts these concreteexamples to make his argument more credible and trustworthy, since the readersknow that these problems do exist in society. The contrast between “Negro andwhite boys” in Vietnam and in the United Sates not only shows the greatinternal discrimination but also implies the bloody side of the war, therefore reinforcingKing’s claim that the United States should not get into the war at first place.
To better persuadethe audience, King selects words with strong negative connotations such as “desperate”,“rejected”, and “angry” to indicate that people in “ghettoes” are sufferingfrom poverty. By adopting these words, King both rouses the reader’s sympathy andunderscores the urgency of reforms. King, though wants changes, knows that hewill “never again” be able to express the problem of oppression in ghettoesunless he first addresses the injustice of the “great purveyor of violence”-the United States involvement in the Vietnam war. This juxtaposition of words forcesthe audience to directly face an emotionally-charged inquiry that will surelyspur some kind of response. King, by doing this, appeals to pathos, addingemotional power to the unjustness of the United States involvement in the Vietnamwar.
It is never toolate to solve the problem, King believes we, the people who also believe in theunjustness of the involvement, are responsible for leading the United States downto the right path. Strategies King employs to back up his central claim- it isunjust to get involved in the Vietnam war- includes personal encounter, appealto ethos, and specific diction.

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发表于 2018-7-14 16:20:22 | 显示全部楼层
Martin Luther KingJr., a famous civil rights leader, offers a convincing argument on the unjustness of the involvement of the United States in the Vietnam war. In Martin Luther King’s speech “Beyond Vietnam- A Time to Break Silence”, King utilizes personal experience, appeal to ethos and vivid word choice to attain his goal- to persuade the audience that the United States was not supposed to get involved in the Vietnam war.

King begins his speech with the connection between the war in Vietnam and his personal observation in the United States. At first he saw a “shining moment”-the “poverty program”- for both black and white poor Americans; however, as the preparation for the Vietnam War began, he “watched this program broken and eviscerated.” By introducing this anecdote, King illustrates how the war in Vietnam is affecting the domestic day-to-day life of the Americans, challenging the audience to make a personal connection. This personal encounter provides a baseline of sorts for the reader to find credence with King’s claim that the war is “an enemy of the poor” and involvement in the war is unjust.

King, in order to further develop his argument, appeals to ethos by contrasting examples in the second paragraph. Watching “Negro and white boys” being killed in the Vietnam warfare, watching them “die together for the country”, and watching them “in brutal solidarity burning the huts a poor village” makes it ironic to think about that domestically rather than being together, they are cruelly segregated; poorpeople live in totally different communities from the others; black and white children are not allowed to sit in the same classroom. King adopts these concrete examples to make his argument more credible and trustworthy, since the readers know that these problems do exist in society. The contrast between “Negro andwhite boys” in Vietnam and in the United Sates not only shows the great internal discrimination but also implies the bloody side of the war, therefore reinforcing King’s claim that the United States should not get into the war at first place.

To better persuade the audience, King selects words with strong negative connotations such as “desperate”,“rejected”, and “angry” to indicate that people in “ghettoes” are suffering from poverty. By adopting these words, King both rouses the reader’s sympathy and underscores the urgency of reforms. King, though wants changes, knows that he will “never again” be able to express the problem of oppression in ghettoes unless he first addresses the injustice of the “great purveyor of violence”-the United States involvement in the Vietnam war. This juxtaposition of words forces the audience to directly face an emotionally-charged inquiry that will surely spur some kind of response. King, by doing this, appeals to pathos, adding emotional power to the unjustness of the United States involvement in the Vietnamwar.

It is never too late to solve the problem, King believes we, the people who also believe in the unjustness of the involvement, are responsible for leading the United States down to the right path. Strategies King employs to back up his central claim- it is unjust to get involved in the Vietnam war- includes personal encounter, appealto ethos, and specific diction.

文章结构清晰,语言地道,全文490个词,主体段落一的个人经历稍显单薄,原文第三段也有个人经历,建议联系一起分析更有说服力,对重要细节要描述清楚。
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