（评分4-3-3）Sophia Tian let there be dark essay

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In Paul Bogard’s article “Let there be dark”, he’s building an argument to emphasize his point-- we should defend the darkness of nature. I will analyze this article from three aspects: content, structure, and rhetoric.
In terms of content, Paul initially used his own experience to show his position: we should defend the darkness of nature. Because now the cozy night sky which the author enjoys is gone. Then, the author shows the evidence of  "World Health Organization", an authoritative medical institution, that it is harmful to the human body living in the bright night. Coincidentally, the disappearance of the natural darkness not only hurt human health but also damage the entire ecological balance. Because some animals should rely on the night; these animals are generally active at night. The darkness of the night is beautiful and mysterious. Before people enjoy activities under the dark night with only a little light of moon and stars, however now we can not appreciate that feeling. The author is afraid that there will be no artwork about the dark night like the "starry night" in the future. Paul concludes that the natural darkness is getting disappeared, "In the United States and Western Europe, the amount of light in the sky increases an average of about 6% every year." The author points out that now people are aware of the importance of night. For example, Paris, the city as famous as their beautiful lights, turns off light at one a.m. in the midnight every day. Finally, the author calls on people to fight for the preservation of the night.
In terms of structure, Paul uses his own experience to draw the argument of this article: people should protect the night. Then he puts forward sub-arguments and evidence to prove his argument. The structure of this article is compact. The third, fourth and fifth paragraphs are three sub-arguments respectively: human health is harmful without darkness; the ecological environment is damaging without darkness; the nightlife is monotonous without darkness. The author not only cites the argument from the realities that people should protect the night but also appeal to people emotionally. In the last two paragraphs, the author put forward the harsh realities, with fewer and fewer darkness. Then put forward the existing solutions at this stage, people starting protect the darkness.
In terms of rhetoric, Paul uses comparison at the beginning of the article, comparing his own experience of the darkness with that of most U.S. children living without darkness, highlighting that the dark night is getting vanish. The author uses rhetorical questions to express his feelings, "And how would Van Gogh have given the world his" Starry Night "? Who knows what this vision of the night sky might inspire in each of us, in our children or grandchildren?" The use of those rhetorical questions stimulates readers to think of a world without Art masterpiece of enhancing people's sentiments. The suggestion of a world without such works and darkness is “invaluable for a soulful life”.
The context of this article is very close to using multiple rhetorics to highlight the author's point of view, calling for people to reduce the using of lights to protect the night. This article is very appealing so that readers immersive and feel the fear of no natural darkness.

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InPaul Bogard’s article “Let there be dark”, he’s building an argument toemphasize his point-- we should defend the darkness of nature. I will analyzethis article from three aspects: content, structure, and rhetoric.（表述太简单，需要交代具体什么content。这三个词只是符号，方便记忆用的）
In terms of content, Paul initially used his own experience to show hisposition: we should defend the darkness of nature. （具体什么经历没有交代，后半句只是在重复首段主旨，不具代表性）Because now the cozy nightsky which the author enjoys is gone. （because不能单独成句）Then, the author shows the evidenceof  "World Health Organization", an authoritative medicalinstitution, that it is harmful to the human body living in the bright night.Coincidentally, the disappearance of the natural darkness not only hurt（harms） humanhealth but also damages the entire ecological balance. Because some animalsshould rely on the night; （改为，）these animals are generally active at night. Thedarkness of the night is beautiful and mysterious. Before people enjoyactivities under the dark night with only a little light of moon and stars,however now we can not appreciate that feeling.（表述不清） The author is afraid that therewill be no artwork about the dark night like the "starry night" inthe future. Paul concludes that the natural darkness is getting disappeared（disappearing）,"In the United States and Western Europe, the amount of light in the skyincreases an average of about 6% every year." The author points out thatnow people are aware of the importance of night. For example, Paris, the cityas famous as their beautiful lights, turns off light at one a.m. in themidnight every day. Finally, the author calls on people to fight for thepreservation of the night.(本段首句交代是从个人经历角度分析，但是后面又提到数据，最后提到作者的号召，越写越远，不能做到coherent.或者把首句改为concrete evidence such as personal experience as well as data from authority,然后后面展开论述)

In terms of structure, Paul uses his own experience to draw the argument ofthis article: people should protect the night. Then he puts forwardsub-arguments and evidence to prove his argument. The structure of this articleis compact. The third, fourth and fifth paragraphs are three sub-argumentsrespectively: human health is harmful without darkness; the ecological environmentis damaging without darkness; the nightlife is monotonous without darkness. Theauthor not only cites the argument from the realities that people shouldprotect the night but also appeal to people emotionally. In the last twoparagraphs, the author put forward the harsh realities, with fewer and fewerdarkness. Then put forward the existing solutions at this stage, peoplestarting protect the darkness. 本段末尾缺乏总结句，比如这种分析脉络如何影响读者接受其观点

In terms of rhetoric, Paul uses comparison at the beginning of the article,comparing his own experience of the darkness with that of most U.S. childrenliving without darkness, highlighting that the dark night is getting vanish（vanishing）.The author uses rhetorical questions to express his feelings, "And howwould Van Gogh have given the world his" Starry Night "? Who knowswhat this vision of the night sky might inspire in each of us, in our childrenor grandchildren?" The use of those rhetorical questions stimulatesreaders to think of a world without Art masterpiece of enhancing people'ssentiments. The suggestion of a world without such works and darkness is“invaluable for a soulful life”. 如何影响读者，比如直击心灵等等。

The context of this article is very close to using multiple rhetorics tohighlight the author's point of view, calling for people to reduce the using oflights to protect the night. This article is very appealing so that readersimmersive and feel the fear of no natural darkness.



能准确理解文章主旨及重要细节，但分析不够深入，句式缺乏多样性。
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