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(评分4-3-3)Why We Should Work Less

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发表于 2020-5-24 08:22:18 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
In the short article, “Why We Should Work Less,” Richard Schiffman argued that Americans should work less to maintain their health, well being, and even the good for the planet. Schiffman, like any other good writer, employs tactical reasoning and perspective devices to plead with the audience to take his side.

“Her job was killing her,” Schiffman was surprised to hear that people are stressed from their jobs.  That made him curious about how working became an issue by getting information from his another friend. She responded by saying she is “...routinely forced to work late and at home on weekends - often without pay - on projects she didn’t have time to finish at the office.” Only including his friends’ opinion might not prove how much Americans are working.
Therefore, he researched, and discovered how much time Americans are working a year: hundreds of hours more than the Europeans. This statement leaves the reader wondering if working hard all day really worth it.  Shiffman provided phrases like “killing” “forced to” and “threat” in the passage to claim the seriousness of this issue. His Friends' opinion explained how their jobs are tough and destroy their health; their opinions about their jobs provide background information for the readers.

Schiffman tried to find out why Americans must work hard, and discovered that grueling work schedules are necessary to boost productivity. Indeed, “... the productivity of U.S. workers has increased more than fourfold since the 1950s.” However, the buying power of wages has remained stagnant and in recent years has even begun to decline. Government decided for Americans to work hard during WWII but why must we have the same schedule as then when productivity has already increased more than fourfold with no benefits other than high productivity? To the data, Schiffman responded, “Someone is getting rich off the exponential rise in productivity, but it is not the American worker.”

Schiffman declared that shortening the workweek would be incalculable for Americans’ health, well being, and good for the planet. The majority of the Americans would be willing to accept a smaller paycheck in return for more time with their family and their leisure according to the survey from the Center for a New American Dream. The author tried to show how Americans have less time with their family and leisure compared to working in their workplace. These facts back up Schiffman’s claim that Americans should work less is a better choice. There is no point of spending your time on your job over your family. Reducing the work hours not only benefits human health, but also the planet. A study from ”The center for Economic and Policy Research estimated that, if the United States were to emulate the shorter workweeks of Western Europe, energy consumption would decline about 20 percent and our country could significantly diminish its carbon footprint.” Carbon footprint is a serious problem nowadays, but Schiffman found it simple to solve the problem.
Why do Americans have to work that hard when there are countless benefits of them working less?

Schiffman has made his way of thinking clearly with various perspectives and effective passage. He provided various benefits of working less that made readers almost impossible to deny his thinking. After reading the article, there seem to be no reason to let Americans work hard all day.
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In the short article, “Why We Should Work Less,” Richard Schiffman argued that Americans should work less to maintain their health, well being, and even the good for the planet. Schiffman, like any other good writer, employs tactical reasoning and perspective devices to plead with the audience to take his side.

首句先点明personal experience然后交代朋友工作量过大的经历“Her job was killing her,” Schiffman was surprised to hear that people are stressed from their jobs.  That made him curious about how working became an issue by getting information from his another friend. She responded by saying she is “...routinely forced to work late and at home on weekends - often without pay - on projects she didn’t have time to finish at the office.”

Only including his friends’ opinion might not prove how much Americans are working. 此处要交代第二个分析视角statistics and authority
Therefore, he researched, and discovered how much time Americans are working a year: hundreds of hours more than the Europeans. This statement leaves the reader wondering if working hard all day really worth it.  Shiffman provided phrases like “killing” “forced to” and “threat” in the passage to claim the seriousness of this issue. His Friends' opinion explained how their jobs are tough and destroy their health; their opinions about their jobs provide background information for the readers.

此处属于concrete examples Schiffman tried to find out why Americans must work hard, and discovered that grueling work schedules are necessary to boost productivity. Indeed, “... the productivity of U.S. workers has increased more than fourfold since the 1950s.” However, the buying power of wages has remained stagnant and in recent years has even begun to decline. Government decided for Americans to work hard during WWII but why must we have the same schedule as then when productivity has already increased more than fourfold with no benefits other than high productivity? To the data, Schiffman responded, “Someone is getting rich off the exponential rise in productivity, but it is not the American worker.”

Schiffman declared that shortening the workweek would be incalculable for Americans’ health, well being, and good for the planet. The majority of the Americans would be willing to accept a smaller paycheck in return for more time with their family and their leisure according to the survey from the Center for a New American Dream. The author tried to show how Americans have less time with their family and leisure compared to working in their workplace. These facts back up Schiffman’s claim that Americans should work less is a better choice. There is no point of spending your time on your job over your family. Reducing the work hours not only benefits human health, but also the planet. A study from ”The center for Economic and Policy Research estimated that, if the United States were to emulate the shorter workweeks of Western Europe, energy consumption would decline about 20 percent and our country could significantly diminish its carbon footprint.” Carbon footprint is a serious problem nowadays, but Schiffman found it simple to solve the problem. 有点乱,数据就都放在一起分析,分析角度要统一,不要跳跃思维。
Why do Americans have to work that hard when there are countless benefits of them working less?

Schiffman has made his way of thinking clearly with various perspectives and effective passage. He provided various benefits of working less that made readers almost impossible to deny his thinking. After reading the article, there seem to be no reason to let Americans work hard all day.

分析是有,但是不够深入,都是点到为止,过多的篇幅花在对文章细节的理解上,引用过多,并不需要面面俱到。一定先确定三个视角,然后每个视角下举一到两处例子即可。句式注意多样性,模仿使用高级句式。
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