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(评分3-3-4)SAT OG(2018)-P356 Seasons of Life and Land

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发表于 2017-12-31 04:47:34 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
In Jimmy Carter’s  “Seasons of Life and Land,” editorial for the Subhankar Banerjee, he argues that the Arctic National Wildlife Refuge should not be developed for industry. By the end of this piece, readers will likely to find themselves nodding in agreement with what Jimmy Carter has to say. Carter employs personal evidence, appeals to authority, and diction(word choice) to plead with the audience to take his side.
            Jimmy Carter starts his article with his personal experience with his wife to the Arctic Refuge. In this unforgettable trip, Carter and his wife found themselves feel in love with this place: “There was a timeless quality about this great land.” Carter and his wife had a wonderful trip in Arctic Regue, they explored the caribou trials and studied the brilliant mosaic of wildflowers, which makes the readers think the landscapes of the Arctic Refuge are gorgeous and people need to preserve this beautiful place. These compelling examples associated with social occasions effectively arouse readers’ emotional consensus, thus lending more credence to the author’s claim. Also, these personal experience shorten the gap between the author and readers, raising the stakes of his argument.
            Carter then strengthens his argument by appealing the thought of authority. The extraordinary wilderness and wildlife values of the Arctic Refuge have long been recognized by both Republican and Democratic presidents, to protect the wilderness and wildlife: “ In 1960, President Dwight D. Eisenhower established the original 8.9 million-acre Arctic National Wildlife Range to preserve its environment.” To protect the wilderness of Arctic Refuge, the president signed the law to defend it, which makes the readers think that everyone has the responsibility to protect this environment, and the Arctic Refuge should not be developed for industry. The inclusion of the president lends more credibility to the author’s argument.
            Last but not least, Carter’s language and word choice make the readers stand on his side. To deepen readers’ mind, Carter repeatedly using the word “extraordinary,” which causes the readers to consider Arctic Refuge as a beautiful place to have on Earth and people should not develop this amazing place for industry. In the article, Carter describes this Refuge as the extraordinary: “To leave this extraordinary and alone would be the greatest gift we could pass on to future generation.” The writer uses precisely chosen words to characterize Refuge as an “extraordinary place.” This juxtaposition of words underscores the writer's claim that the Arctic National Wildlife Refuge should not be developed for industry and thereby creates a compelling appeal to readers’ emotions.
            It is through many rhetorical devices that Jimmy Carter sells his argument. Personal evidence, appeals to authority, and diction(word choice) contribute to an exceptionally well-known argument. It is his utilization of these practices and more that makes this article worthy of recognition.

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        In Jimmy Carter’s  “Seasons ofLife and Land,” editorial for the Subhankar Banerjee, he argues that the ArcticNational Wildlife Refuge should not be developed for industry. By the end ofthis piece, readers will likely to find themselves nodding in agreement withwhat Jimmy Carter has to say. Carter employs personal evidence, appeals toauthority, and diction(word choice) to plead with the audience to take hisside.
           Jimmy Carter starts his article with his personal experience with hiswife to the Arctic Refuge. In this unforgettable trip, Carter and his wifefound themselves feel(删去) in love with this place: “There was a timeless qualityabout this great land.” Carter and his wife had a wonderful trip in ArcticRegue, they explored the caribou trials and studied the brilliant mosaic ofwildflowers, which makes the readers think the landscapes of the Arctic Refugeare gorgeous and people need to preserve this beautiful place. These compellingexamples associated with social occasions effectively arouse readers’ emotionalconsensus, thus lending more credence to the author’s claim. Also, thesepersonal experience shorten the gap between the author and readers, raising thestakes of his argument. 原文二三两段都是个人经历,重要细节概括不够到位。
           Carter then strengthens his argument by appealing the thoughtof authority. The extraordinary wilderness and wildlife values of the ArcticRefuge have long been recognized by both Republican and Democratic presidents,to protect the wilderness and wildlife: “ In 1960, President Dwight D.Eisenhower established the original 8.9 million-acre Arctic National WildlifeRange to preserve its environment.” To protect the wilderness of Arctic Refuge,the president signed the law to defend it, which makes the readers think thateveryone has the responsibility to protect this environment, and that the ArcticRefuge should not be developed for industry. The inclusion of the presidentlends more credibility to the author’s argument.本段选材属于historical evidence(have long been recognized by...),而非权威。
           Last but not least, Carter’s language and word choice makethe readers stand on his side. To deepen readers’ mind, Carter repeatedly using(uses)the word “extraordinary,” which causes the readers to consider Arctic Refuge asa beautiful place to have on Earth and people should not develop this amazingplace for industry(句式杂糅,需另起一句). In the article, Carter describes this Refuge as theextraordinary: “To leave this extraordinary and alone would be the greatestgift we could pass on to future generation.” The writer uses precisely chosenwords to characterize Refuge as an “extraordinary place.” This juxtaposition ofwords underscores the writer's claim that the Arctic National Wildlife Refugeshould not be developed for industry and thereby creates a compelling appeal toreaders’ emotions. 文章有很多优秀措辞,比如meander,once-in-a-lifetime等。只是围绕extraordinery分析,稍显单调和单薄。
           It is through many rhetorical devices that Jimmy Cartersells his argument. Personal evidence, appeals to authority, and diction(wordchoice) contribute to an exceptionally well-known argument. It is hisutilization of these practices and more that makes this article worthy ofrecognition.


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文章结构清晰,语言多样,但是重要细节概括不足,选材不够典型。
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